I received my script yesterday and I just wanted to pass along a quick thanks for your in-depth analysis and suggestions. I was especially impressed with the story notes (marked right on my spec). Those will prove to be invaluable as I rewrite, Conduct Unbecoming.
I did receive your evaluation of my script, and quite timely, I might add. Thank you both. Your criticisms are well taken and you've sparked a renewed interest in me regarding this story. I'm faced with a page-1 rewrite and may wait until this summer to tackle it again.
I received your evaluation last week. I have read both of your critiques and about half the marked-up script. Your evaluation was exactly what we needed to see--a refreshing dose of reality. I knew our script had problems going in. Now that the weaknesses have been pointed out, the rewrite should be an enjoyable journey.
I received my script and your evaluations yesterday. I've read through the package only once, but I want you to know that I am both appreciative and impressed with your work. Your evaluations and recommendations are well developed and provide great guidance. I'm a strong believer in "When you're ready - it will happen," I just wish that I had been ready for you sooner in my writing career. I'm so pleased with your work, that I am going to send you another one of my scripts. Again, thanks for your assistance and responsiveness.
I read your analysis and feel that of all of the money and time I have spent trying hone my skills as a screenwriter, nothing comes close to what I received from you. While mine may be a slow process over the next several months, I plan to review your comments and suggestions and study them well. I appreciate your willingness to stay with me through the process. Again, thank you both for you time and insight.
I got both scripts today. First, let me thank you very much!! For the first time I feel I got an honest critique of my work.
Bonnie and Andy:
Have I sent you a portion of HSS before? I look forward to your comments. I have recommended many writers send you their screenplays to get the best feedback. I like your new site. It’s much easier to navigate. I chose the expanded feedback after the excellent notes I received on Felix the Flyer.
As always please feel free to use my comments in any of your promotions.
Hi Bonnie and Andy,
I want you to know that I've always appreciated all you've done for me with Dragons. Sometimes I wish I could just hand it over to someone to fix. I'd love to see it as a movie. Anyway, the journey is what it is all about, right?
Thanks a million!
Thank you for taking the time to read 'Finding Solace'.
My biggest problem which I've come to now recognize seems to be the characters. I've recently started addressing the issue and have already started implementing it in my rewrite for an upcoming contest deadline.
How long until the next 20/20 contest? I would like to resubmit after my rewrite.
Thanks for the prompt response. Yes, I deleted the flashback and ended it on Reagan and Adam celebrating her vindication. I added a little more humor to the piece, fixed typos, altered the opening raid a tad, and changed narrative to add impact. When I go over it again I'm considering sending it to your company for a full script consultation. I've also started my third script. Best way to learn is to practice!
It’s easy to find “friends” who will tell you that your script is perfect and that your every word is gold. It’s harder to find people like Andy and Bonnie who will tell you what you need to know if you want to grow as a writer. They have seen literally thousands of scripts and know how to identify script problems from major structural flaws down to simple format errors. At the same time, they are open-minded and avoid the simplistic solutions of the much-hyped gurus.
Thank you Bonnie and Andy for being my partner in the exciting adventure of screenwriting. You listened to my crazy pitches, you critiqued my shaky first drafts, you helped me perfect my final script and in the process made me a better writer. But most importantly of all, you helped me sell my very first screenplay. I couldn’t have done it without you.
I read your notes. Many excellent points and starting places to think about. A delight speaking with you both. You’re smart, funny and very nice people – a bit atypical in this industry.